Sunday, March 13, 2011

Reviewing Angus Engelen's speech

1) Angus Engelen
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  • Yes the introduction got my attention because he made me think about life and how it is so short and can end at any time
  • NO draft at school
  • NO draft at school
  • NO draft at school 

Wednesday, March 9, 2011

Draft for speech (cannot complete because of using one hand +CAS)

Everyone knows that one day you will die but most people do not know when. Imagine if you did know you were going to die and all you need was a single kidney but you were put onto a waiting list with 105 000 other people around the world. But that could all change if just one person had donated organs that could save you life. I believe that it should be made the law to donate your organs after you pass away.

Don't you want to save lives? and its as simple as just signing a letter and you can save up to 8 people from your donation

18 people die per day while waiting for an organ that would suit their body, if everyone donated their organs there would be no waiting list and many thousands of lives would be saved every year.


Tuesday, March 8, 2011

HW: Two Import Facts about abortion


Number of abortion per year
WORLDWIDE
Number of abortions per year: Approximately 42 Million
Number of abortions per day: Approximately 115,000

Where abortions occur:
83% of all abortions are obtained in developing countries and 17% occur in developed countries.

I think this is important because it shows just how many abortions occur every day and every year worldwide.
Who's having abortions (age)?52% of women obtaining abortions in the U.S. are younger than 25: Women aged 20-24 obtain 32% of all abortions; Teenagers obtain 20% and girls under 15 account for 1.2%.
I think this is important because it shows that 52% of women who have abortion are younger that 25 
Why women have abortions1% of all abortions occur because of rape or incest; 6% of abortions occur because of potential health problems regarding either the mother or child, and 93% of all abortions occur for social reasons (i.e. the child is unwanted or inconvenient)
This is important because it shows that 93% of abortions are unwanted or inconvenient and that i think that most of these babies could still be alive and many couple could be very happy




all this info was obtained from http://www.abortionno.org/Resources/fastfacts.html
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Speech assignment

The topic that i have chosen to do for my assignment is "Abortion should be stopped" i have chosen this topic because i believe that abortion is murder and i think it is totally wrong to kill a baby while it is alive but not born yet. One of my points is that if that baby was even one minute old and someone came in and killed it they would go to jail but for murder so what makes it okay to kill a baby before it is born and even if they didn't want the baby eg teen pregnancy, there are thousands of older couples that are unable to have kids and would happy to have the teen baby.
imagine if you were aborted and weren't here right now because you were unexpended or unwanted. Wouldn't you much rather have a parent that had adopted you not be here right now.

Note: USE LOGIC as well as Ethos

Sunday, March 6, 2011

(Late because of collar bone) MLK I have a dream




I am happy to join with you today in what will go down in history as the greatest demonstration for freedom in the history of our nation.
Five score years ago, a great American, in whose symbolic shadow we stand today, signed the Emancipation Proclamation. This momentous decree came as a great beacon light of hope to millions of Negro slaves who had been seared in the flames of withering injustice. It came as a joyous daybreak to end the long night of their captivity.
But one hundred years later, the Negro still is not free. One hundred years later, the life of the Negro is still sadly crippled by the manacles of segregation and the chains of discriminationOne hundred years later, the Negro lives on a lonely island of poverty in the midst of a vast ocean of material prosperity. One hundred years later, the Negro is still languished in the corners of American society and finds himself an exile in his own land. And so we've come here today to dramatize a shameful condition.
In a sense we've come to our nation's capital to cash a check. When the architects of our republic wrote the magnificent words of the Constitution and the Declaration of Independence, they were signing a promissory note to which every American was to fall heir. This note was a promise that all men, yes, black men as well as white men, would be guaranteed the "unalienable Rights" of "Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness." It is obvious today that America has defaulted on this promissory note, insofar as her citizens of color are concerned. Instead of honoring this sacred obligation, America has given the Negro people a bad check, a check which has come back marked "insufficient funds."
But we refuse to believe that the bank of justice is bankrupt. We refuse to believe that there are insufficient funds in the great vaults of opportunity of this nation. And so, we've come to cash this check, a check that will give us upon demand the riches of freedom and the security of justice.
We have also come to this hallowed spot to remind America of the fierce urgency of Now. This is no time to engage in the luxury of cooling off or to take the tranquilizing drug of gradualism. Now is the time to make real the promises of democracy. Now is the time to rise from the dark and desolate valley of segregation to the sunlit path of racial justiceNow is the time to lift our nation from the quicksands of racial injustice to the solid rock of brotherhood. Now is the time to make justice a reality for all of God's children.
It would be fatal for the nation to overlook the urgency of the moment. This sweltering summer of the Negro's legitimate discontent will not pass until there is an invigorating autumn of freedom and equality. Nineteen sixty-three is not an end, but a beginning. And those who hope that the Negro needed to blow off steam and will now be content will have a rude awakening if the nation returns to business as usual. And there will be neither rest nor tranquility in America until the Negro is granted his citizenship rights. The whirlwinds of revolt will continue to shake the foundations of our nation until the bright day of justice emerges.
But there is something that I must say to my people, who stand on the warm threshold which leads into the palace of justice: In the process of gaining our rightful place, we mustnot be guilty of wrongful deeds. Let us not seek to satisfy our thirst for freedom by drinking from the cup of bitterness and hatred. We must forever conduct our struggle on the high plane of dignity and discipline. We must not allow our creative protest to degenerate into physical violence. Again and again, we must rise to the majestic heights of meeting physical force with soul force.
The marvelous new militancy which has engulfed the Negro community must not lead us to a distrust of all white people, for many of our white brothers, as evidenced by their presence here today, have come to realize that their destiny is tied up with our destiny. And they have come to realize that their freedom is inextricably bound to our freedom.
We cannot walk alone.
And as we walk, we must make the pledge that we shall always march ahead.
We cannot turn back.
There are those who are asking the devotees of civil rights, "When will you be satisfied?"We can never be satisfied as long as the Negro is the victim of the unspeakable horrors of police brutality. We can never be satisfied as long as our bodies, heavy with the fatigue of travel, cannot gain lodging in the motels of the highways and the hotels of the cities. We cannot be satisfied as long as the negro's basic mobility is from a smaller ghetto to a larger one. We can never be satisfied as long as our children are stripped of their self-hood and robbed of their dignity by signs stating: "For Whites Only." We cannot be satisfied as long as a Negro in Mississippi cannot vote and a Negro in New York believes he has nothing for which to vote. No, no, we are not satisfied, and we will not be satisfied until "justice rolls down like waters, and righteousness like a mighty stream."¹
I am not unmindful that some of you have come here out of great trials and tribulations. Some of you have come fresh from narrow jail cells. And some of you have come from areas where your quest -- quest for freedom left you battered by the storms of persecution and staggered by the winds of police brutality. You have been the veterans of creative suffering. Continue to work with the faith that unearned suffering is redemptive. Go back toMississippi, go back to Alabama, go back to South Carolina, go back to Georgia, go back toLouisiana, go back to the slums and ghettos of our northern cities, knowing that somehow this situation can and will be changed.
Let us not wallow in the valley of despair, I say to you today, my friends.
And so even though we face the difficulties of today and tomorrow, I still have a dream. It is a dream deeply rooted in the American dream.
I have a dream that one day this nation will rise up and live out the true meaning of its creed: "We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal."
I have a dream that one day on the red hills of Georgia, the sons of former slaves and the sons of former slave owners will be able to sit down together at the table of brotherhood.
I have a dream that one day even the state of Mississippi, a state sweltering with the heat of injustice, sweltering with the heat of oppression, will be transformed into an oasis of freedom and justice.
I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character.
I have a dream today!
I have a dream that one day, down in Alabama, with its vicious racists, with its governor having his lips dripping with the words of "interposition" and "nullification" -- one day right there in Alabama little black boys and black girls will be able to join hands with little white boys and white girls as sisters and brothers.
I have a dream today!
I have a dream that one day every valley shall be exalted, and every hill and mountain shall be made low, the rough places will be made plain, and the crooked places will be made straight; "and the glory of the Lord shall be revealed and all flesh shall see it together."2
This is our hope, and this is the faith that I go back to the South with.
With this faith, we will be able to hew out of the mountain of despair a stone of hope. With this faith, we will be able to transform the jangling discords of our nation into a beautiful symphony of brotherhood. With this faith, we will be able to work together, to pray together, to struggle together, to go to jail together, to stand up for freedom together, knowing that we will be free one day.
And this will be the day -- this will be the day when all of God's children will be able to sing with new meaning:
My country 'tis of thee, sweet land of liberty, of thee I sing.
Land where my fathers died, land of the Pilgrim's pride,
From every mountainside, let freedom ring!
And if America is to be a great nation, this must become true.
And so let freedom ring from the prodigious hilltops of New Hampshire.
Let freedom ring from the mighty mountains of New York.
Let freedom ring from the heightening Alleghenies of Pennsylvania.
Let freedom ring from the snow-capped Rockies of Colorado.
Let freedom ring from the curvaceous slopes of California.
But not only that:
Let freedom ring from Stone Mountain of Georgia.
Let freedom ring from Lookout Mountain of Tennessee.
Let freedom ring from every hill and molehill of Mississippi.
From every mountainside, let freedom ring.
And when this happens, when we allow freedom ring, when we let it ring from every village and every hamlet, from every state and every city, we will be able to speed up that day when all of God's children, black men and white men, Jews and Gentiles, Protestants and Catholics, will be able to join hands and sing in the words of the old Negro spiritual:
                Free at last! Free at last!
                Thank God Almighty, we are free at last!
 
1. Summarize the thesis of the speech in one sentence. The thesis of this speech is to display the injustices of segregation. That everyone should be equal, bring black and white people together.
2. Mode of Persuasion? (it is ok to have more than one) Give examples to support your answer/answers. He uses lots of repetition eg But one hundred years later, the Negro still is not free. One hundred years later, the life of the Negro is still sadly crippled by the manacles of segregation and the chains of discrimination. One hundred years later, the Negro lives on a lonely island of poverty in the midst of a vast ocean of material prosperity. One hundred years later, and  Now is the time to make real the promises of democracy. Now is the time to rise from the dark and desolate valley of segregation to the sunlit path of racial justice. Now is the time to lift our nation from the quicksands of racial injustice to the solid rock of brotherhood.
3. Major techniques (highlight all examplesRepetition and metaphors is the main techniques used in this speech.
4. What is the historical context of this speech? Black People are still not completely free and they still don't have as much rights as white people or as widely respected
5. Do you feel that this is an effective speech? (answer in a paragraph) Yes because he engages the black and white which is amazing because back then the black people weren't allowed to have a say in anything. Also he uses repetition to send home a message the message that he wants them to under stand what he is talking about.




speaking assessment task


Nature of Task
Persuasive texts are designed to position a point of view (opinion - thesis).

Texts that successfully persuade are usually highly emotive (emotional words + influence listener/audience emotions) and effectively balance opinions with facts( Research -logos).

Persuasive texts can make sweeping generalisations (uniformed conclusion), rely on stereotypes and hyperbole and yet still seem credible.

This is because a combination of objective (Facts) and subjective (opinion) information is usually used to persuade.

Careful use of repetition and high modality(persuasive techniques) words can emphatically convey the composer’s purpose if it is counterbalanced with the use of statistics, expert evidence and product/idea endorsement from authoritative sources. (ethos, objective).

 Moreover, effective incorporation of anecdotes(personal story), analogies (comparison) and inclusive language (we, us, ours - includethe audience, techniques) can personalise the message and help connect the composer and their text with its audience.

(late because of collar bone) CAS Speech

LOGOS
In this speech i will be convincing you that we should be allowed to go to the CAS Swimming carnival on Thursday.

I think that our class should be allowed to go to the CAS swimming carnival because it would be a great experience to go and support the school again and have some fun with my friends. I think that the more people/ support that we have to the CAS swimming carnival the better the school will go because they will want to be good in front of their school and friends and they don't want to loose in front of all these people.

As a conclusion that i think that we should all go to the CAS swimming carnival and support the whole school and also support the CAS Knox school swimmers.